need help wording this one correctly.

[CaptContagious]

this is what i got so far -

a vultite-edged eahnor flamberge with a dragon-shaped hilt with the show of: The beautiful crimson eahnor blade is keenly edged in high polished vultite leading into the dragon shaped hilt. The placement of the lower head of the Black dragon allows its massive horns to function as parrying hooks as its long neck creates the ricasso of the blade. Its fully outstretched wings of the dragon construct the crossguard of the hilt as its straight slender body and tail form the remaining handle the flamberges hilt.


thoughts? Ideas? sound ok?

[Tgo01]

Its fully outstretched wings of the dragon construct the crossguard of the hilt as its straight slender body and tail form the remaining handle the flamberges hilt.

Should that read "of the flamberges hilt" or am I just totally misreading this?

[thefarmer]

You're going to need to chop down the base.

You can't do a long description and a show without a special script.

[CaptContagious]

nope you're right, thanks!

[CaptContagious]

You're going to need to chop down the base.

You can't do a long description and a show without a special script.

gotcha that the uhm... 15/5/15 or something right?

[CaptContagious]

15/15/15 it seems

[CaptContagious]

a dragon-hilted eahnor flamberge and just leave out the vultite part all together? (base and show?)

[Nauriel]

Well, thought id take a crack at just rewording and not changing your idea too much. Wasnt sure if you wanted a crazy total overhaul or not ;) Its under word limit, though I didnt really proof my grammar or anything so it might be a bit rough in places.

a dragon-hilted eahnor flamberge
SHOW: This beautiful crimson weapon is keenly edged in polished vultite, the mirror-finished lines of undulating metal leading up into the dragon shaped hilt. Placement of the black dragon's lower head allows for its massive horns to function as parrying hooks and its long neck the ricasso of the blade. Fully outstretched wings serve as quillions, guarding the slender body of the dragon that comprises the hilt while its tail curls into an infinity knot pommel.

[Fallen]

Maybe this beautiful instead of the in the first sentence. Stick a "the" at the beginning of the second sentence.

[MotleyCrew]

Maybe this beautiful instead of the in the first sentence. Yes


Stick a "the" at the beginning of the second sentence. No

[Nauriel]

just realized I had crossguards and guarding next to each other, not to mention crossguards shouldnt be plural. /facepalm. damn hasty alter writing!

quillions here I come!