Kitsun
07-11-2004, 01:48 PM
Well, I won Bemm's tournament aboard the Dhu Gilly and I get a nifty set of customized ones. While terribly fun to design, its been more alter writing than I've done in quite a long time. I think I'm on my seventh revision now and it feels like I keep missing stuff.
So if anyone is feeling bored and wants to help me smooth out the grammar, phrasing or whatever; please do!
If anyone around Illistim feels up for a match, let me know!
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Sorcerer
SHORT: a regal Nalfein/princess/miniature
SHOW: You see a finely-dress Nalfein princess miniature crafted with remarkably intricate details. She appears poised with an air of royalty, a dainty golden circlet resting lightly on her brow. Her slender figure is especially pronounced by her silken robes casually tied at the waist. A pattern of beautiful black roses adorns the flaring green sleeves of her garment.
ATTACK: The slender Nalfein princess giggles and snaps her fingers. An enveloping darkness rises from the ground. From the murky depths, shadowy tendrils entangle the (target) while jagged streams of black viciously impale it repeatedly.
MISS: The Nalfein princess throws her arms high to cast a spell! Her incantation is interrupted as she flusters to catch her slipping robes. Blushing furiously, she secures them again.
DEATH: The Nalfein princess gestures wearily as she loses consciousness and summons a surprised hamster that lands awkwardly on her body.
Wizard
SHORT: a cigar-chewing/goggled Nalfein/miniature
SHOW: You see a roughly crafted Nalfein miniature wearing a pair of dusty glaes goggles. The style of the craftsmanship seems a perfect match with the oil covered, rugged, cigar-chewing and spiky haired look of the elf. A pair of heavy razern-bound acid cannons rest casually over his shoulders.
ATTACK: The spiky-haired Nalfein nods his head and his goggles fall to cover his eyes. He deftly alternates between twirling and loading his two heavy razern-bound acid cannons. With a smirk, he fires them both at (target) with unerring accuracy; a loud sizzling sound fills the area.
MISS: The spiky-haired Nalfein quickly loads his acid cannons and prepares to aim when he seems to be struck by inspiration. Losing interest in his target, he traces an elaborate swirling design in the ground with streams of acid.
DEATH: One of the Nalfein's cannons explodes, leaving nothing behind but a puddle of steaming green goop.
Warrior
SHORT: a hulking/razern golem/miniature
SHOW: This towering form is made from jagged, animated shards of pure razern. From its elongated eye socks emits a dull red glow, giving this hulking golem a purely malevolent appearance. Its partially clenched bulky fists resemble the halves of a crude iron maiden.
ATTACK: Unleashing an unearthly bellow, the razern golem charges toward (target) with astonishing speed. The golem clenches its fists around its prey in a vice-like grip, and then with a sinister laugh, the mangled opponent is hurled away into a heap.
MISS: The razern golem smashes its fists into the ground, sending debris that barely misses (target). It suddenly bellows, "REND, TEAR, and DESTROY!"
DEATH: As the magic that held the razern golem together dissipates, it crumbles to a lifeless jagged heap on the ground.
Ballista
SHORT: A tiny razern/hairball/launcher
SHOW: This delicately crafted miniature is made from blackened silver forged to resemble the form of a roaring panther. A clever design filled with levers, springs and latches allows this launcher to fire objects a great distance. Besides a group of placid felines lounging on the launcher is a pile of stringy hairballs.
FIRE: A gaggle of hacking sounds is heard from the depths of the cannon before a group of felines crawl out of the large end of the launcher. A tiny kitten purposefully pounces onto the firing lever.
HIT: The *SpRoInG* is heard from the launcher as it sends gigantic hairball crashing comically on top of (target).
MISS: A *SpRoInG* is heard from the launcher, followed by a screech of claws on metal and a troubled meow as a veercat is sent sprawling from the barrel of the cannon.
Ballista
SHORT: A twisted/shadow creature/miniature
ALTERNATE: a twisted shadowling miniature
ALTERNATE: a twisted shadow fiend miniature
SHOW: You see a deep black twisted creature enshrouded by a billowing ethereal cloak. Any limbs that can be seen of this miniature appear to be mangled and malformed.
FIRE: The shadow creature swirls and thickens until it becomes more substantial while the darkness seems to bleed tendrils into its outstretched arms.
HIT: The creature suddenly flings jagged black spears that slash (target) with a sickening tearing sound.
MISS: The shadow creature writhes about in irritated swirls of darkness before launching a series of shadowy spears! The objects become insubstantial before reaching its target.
Catapult
SHORT: a tiny smooth/golvern/golem
SHOW: You see a towering golem composed of resplendent golvern. Strapped to the massive figure’s back is a lumpy blackened steel rucksack with a crude dog’s head design upon the side. It appears to be wearing a tightly ringed invar mesh loincloth.
FIRE: The golvern golem quickly thrusts its hand into its rucksack and pulls out a stone mastiff by the scruff of its neck.
HIT: The golvern golem hurls the stone mastiff at (target). The intensely powerful impact turns the pitifully yipping mastiff into a shower of rocky debris.
MISS: As the golem arches back to hurl the mastiff, its jaws catches onto the golem’s loincloth and almost pulls it free. The golem tosses the mastiff aside, readjusts its invar mesh loincloth and attempts to smooth out any wrinkles.
Castle
SHORT: A small golvern/Nalfein/keep
SHOW: You see a masterfully detailed miniature version of an expansive Nalfein keep made from solid golvern. Gleaming razern outline the elegant spires that rise high into the air. An orderly placement of archer slits line the exterior walls while murder holes guard the gatehouse.
FIX-OUTER: Teams of Nalfein nimbly scale the keep and make repairs. Before finishing, a member makes a rude gesture over the walls.
FIX-INNER: Teams of Nalfein nimbly scale the inner walls and make repairs. Before finishing, a member screams profanities over the walls.
FIX-MACHINES: A team of Nalfein workers scramble to repair the siege equipment! Before leaving, one of them makes funny faces over the walls.
So if anyone is feeling bored and wants to help me smooth out the grammar, phrasing or whatever; please do!
If anyone around Illistim feels up for a match, let me know!
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Sorcerer
SHORT: a regal Nalfein/princess/miniature
SHOW: You see a finely-dress Nalfein princess miniature crafted with remarkably intricate details. She appears poised with an air of royalty, a dainty golden circlet resting lightly on her brow. Her slender figure is especially pronounced by her silken robes casually tied at the waist. A pattern of beautiful black roses adorns the flaring green sleeves of her garment.
ATTACK: The slender Nalfein princess giggles and snaps her fingers. An enveloping darkness rises from the ground. From the murky depths, shadowy tendrils entangle the (target) while jagged streams of black viciously impale it repeatedly.
MISS: The Nalfein princess throws her arms high to cast a spell! Her incantation is interrupted as she flusters to catch her slipping robes. Blushing furiously, she secures them again.
DEATH: The Nalfein princess gestures wearily as she loses consciousness and summons a surprised hamster that lands awkwardly on her body.
Wizard
SHORT: a cigar-chewing/goggled Nalfein/miniature
SHOW: You see a roughly crafted Nalfein miniature wearing a pair of dusty glaes goggles. The style of the craftsmanship seems a perfect match with the oil covered, rugged, cigar-chewing and spiky haired look of the elf. A pair of heavy razern-bound acid cannons rest casually over his shoulders.
ATTACK: The spiky-haired Nalfein nods his head and his goggles fall to cover his eyes. He deftly alternates between twirling and loading his two heavy razern-bound acid cannons. With a smirk, he fires them both at (target) with unerring accuracy; a loud sizzling sound fills the area.
MISS: The spiky-haired Nalfein quickly loads his acid cannons and prepares to aim when he seems to be struck by inspiration. Losing interest in his target, he traces an elaborate swirling design in the ground with streams of acid.
DEATH: One of the Nalfein's cannons explodes, leaving nothing behind but a puddle of steaming green goop.
Warrior
SHORT: a hulking/razern golem/miniature
SHOW: This towering form is made from jagged, animated shards of pure razern. From its elongated eye socks emits a dull red glow, giving this hulking golem a purely malevolent appearance. Its partially clenched bulky fists resemble the halves of a crude iron maiden.
ATTACK: Unleashing an unearthly bellow, the razern golem charges toward (target) with astonishing speed. The golem clenches its fists around its prey in a vice-like grip, and then with a sinister laugh, the mangled opponent is hurled away into a heap.
MISS: The razern golem smashes its fists into the ground, sending debris that barely misses (target). It suddenly bellows, "REND, TEAR, and DESTROY!"
DEATH: As the magic that held the razern golem together dissipates, it crumbles to a lifeless jagged heap on the ground.
Ballista
SHORT: A tiny razern/hairball/launcher
SHOW: This delicately crafted miniature is made from blackened silver forged to resemble the form of a roaring panther. A clever design filled with levers, springs and latches allows this launcher to fire objects a great distance. Besides a group of placid felines lounging on the launcher is a pile of stringy hairballs.
FIRE: A gaggle of hacking sounds is heard from the depths of the cannon before a group of felines crawl out of the large end of the launcher. A tiny kitten purposefully pounces onto the firing lever.
HIT: The *SpRoInG* is heard from the launcher as it sends gigantic hairball crashing comically on top of (target).
MISS: A *SpRoInG* is heard from the launcher, followed by a screech of claws on metal and a troubled meow as a veercat is sent sprawling from the barrel of the cannon.
Ballista
SHORT: A twisted/shadow creature/miniature
ALTERNATE: a twisted shadowling miniature
ALTERNATE: a twisted shadow fiend miniature
SHOW: You see a deep black twisted creature enshrouded by a billowing ethereal cloak. Any limbs that can be seen of this miniature appear to be mangled and malformed.
FIRE: The shadow creature swirls and thickens until it becomes more substantial while the darkness seems to bleed tendrils into its outstretched arms.
HIT: The creature suddenly flings jagged black spears that slash (target) with a sickening tearing sound.
MISS: The shadow creature writhes about in irritated swirls of darkness before launching a series of shadowy spears! The objects become insubstantial before reaching its target.
Catapult
SHORT: a tiny smooth/golvern/golem
SHOW: You see a towering golem composed of resplendent golvern. Strapped to the massive figure’s back is a lumpy blackened steel rucksack with a crude dog’s head design upon the side. It appears to be wearing a tightly ringed invar mesh loincloth.
FIRE: The golvern golem quickly thrusts its hand into its rucksack and pulls out a stone mastiff by the scruff of its neck.
HIT: The golvern golem hurls the stone mastiff at (target). The intensely powerful impact turns the pitifully yipping mastiff into a shower of rocky debris.
MISS: As the golem arches back to hurl the mastiff, its jaws catches onto the golem’s loincloth and almost pulls it free. The golem tosses the mastiff aside, readjusts its invar mesh loincloth and attempts to smooth out any wrinkles.
Castle
SHORT: A small golvern/Nalfein/keep
SHOW: You see a masterfully detailed miniature version of an expansive Nalfein keep made from solid golvern. Gleaming razern outline the elegant spires that rise high into the air. An orderly placement of archer slits line the exterior walls while murder holes guard the gatehouse.
FIX-OUTER: Teams of Nalfein nimbly scale the keep and make repairs. Before finishing, a member makes a rude gesture over the walls.
FIX-INNER: Teams of Nalfein nimbly scale the inner walls and make repairs. Before finishing, a member screams profanities over the walls.
FIX-MACHINES: A team of Nalfein workers scramble to repair the siege equipment! Before leaving, one of them makes funny faces over the walls.