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Jenisi
02-18-2008, 09:06 PM
So I'm in a Speech Class (which I hate) and I'm doing an informative speech on Stephen Colbert, which has to be roughly 5-7 minutes long. What I have so far I feel like I'm giving too much information and it's too wordy and I'm not too sure about my conclusion transition, so any help will be great. Read it outloud if you want to. If you find something more interesting in the rest, let me know and I will focus more on that because I feel like I need to give less info. Thanks guys <3

If tried to write a list of the amount of achievements Stephen Colbert has completed in the past few years of his life, I guarantee your wrist would hurt. He has been named one of Time's most influential persons in America, one of the sexiest men in America by People Magazine, he even has his own Ben and jerry's ice cream flavor "Americone Dream." I could go on and on about his honors but for now inform you of the life of Stephen Colbert so you can understand why this man is deserving of so many awards.

Stephen Colbert was born in America's Capital, Washington DC but was raised in South Carolina where he was the youngest of 11 children in an Irish Catholic Family. They were very close bunch and devout catholic’s and his parents taught them to value intellectualism, where they learned it was possible to question to church and still be catholic. You can see this later in his life where he pokes fun at religion in his comedy, but still remains very religious.

When Stephen was only 10 years old, his father was traveling by plane with two of his brothers to Connecticut for school when the plane crashed and everyone aboard died. Shortly after the crash his mother relocated the family downtown and Stephen had a hard time adapting to all the changes that had taken place in his life. He later describes his childhood after this experience as being "detached" and spending a lot of his free time determined to cheer his mother up through comedic means. He didn't make friends quickly and developed a love for science fiction and fantasy, and started playing dungeons and dragons which was his first exposure to improvinization.

As he grew up, he started to get ideas of what he wanted to do with his life. He wasn't a very good student and wanted to pursue a career in marine biology, more specifically scuba diving, but a surgery to repair his right ear drum went bad and left his deaf in that ear, he was unable to to pursue that dream. He then went off to college where he found it easier to focus on his studies and decided to major in philosophy but participating in school plays while he was there.

He transferred to northwestern university where he decided to study communication with the goal of being a dramatic actor, he was not interested in comedy. But after he graduated he found himself in need of work, and accepted a job at Second City an improv sketch comedy venue, where he paid his bills by answering phones and selling souvenirs. He later found that employees could attend training classes for free and he took advantage of these classes. After a few classes, he was hired to perform and became an understudy for Steve Carrell.

After awhile of touring with Steve Carrel, he was offered a spot on a television show Exit 57, despite winning awards it was canceled after only airing 12 episodes. In 1997, he made a few guest appearances on the "Daily show" on comedy central while also working for another show called "strangers with candy". In 1999, John Stewart took over the Daily Show and Stephen was one of the "correspondents" that filmed segments from remote locations. The show started becoming increasingly popular due to it's coverage of the 2000 presidential election, and from there Stephen Colbert made his mark on America.

Becoming increasingly popular he was offered his own show in 2005, The Colbert report. In this show, Colbert's character portrays an right wing extremist with a strong love for America and Truth and with it's brilliance landed him a 5 year contract with comedy central. Then in 2006, he was asked to speak at the white house correspondents dinner and his speech became an internet and media sensation. After his speech, his ratings rose 37% the following week, and in the May issue of Time magazine James Poniewozik wrote "Stephen Colbert’s speech was the political-cultural touchstone issue of 2006."

(show clip)

In 2007, he released the book "I am America, and so can you". And it did not have all favorable reviews. In one review called "It may be a book, but you can read it" by Janet Maslin in October 2007, she wrote and I quote "Mr. Colbert and his staff write for a particular character with impeccable, deadpan delivery, and there is no book-worthy equivalent of what happens when the real McCoy gets near a microphone" and even with many other reviews just as bad as this one, it persisted to become the number one on the New York times bestsellers list even with competitors such as Alan Greenspan, Oprah Winfrey and Eric Clapton.
And as I said, his awards are seemingly endless and well deserved. He survived a rough childhood that sculpted him to be the strong person he is today. And like many of us, he struggled with deciding on what to do with his life and had to start at the bottom and work his way to the top. From answering phones and selling souvenirs to being called one of the most influential persons in America, it's no wonder someone so hard working has fulfilled the American dream.

Sean of the Thread
02-18-2008, 09:08 PM
I would start with English and grammar.. then work on the speech.

Jenisi
02-18-2008, 09:13 PM
This is a rough draft and I'll be just using an outline as a guide. But since you hate every thing I write about, how about you add me to your ignore list with Stanley.

Revalos
02-18-2008, 09:40 PM
Find a good Stephen Colbert quote to start out with, something that anyone hearing the speech will immediately know that you're talking about him without you even mentioning his name.

Since speech is all about pandering to the audience, is your speech class full of political junkies? (They usually are) If so, concentrate on Colbert's political views (or satire against), and include information on his presidential campaign.

Lastly, if you are allowed, improvise. Don't lock yourself into the speech...roll with key points on an index card or something and if you forget something, just move on.

The Ponzzz
02-18-2008, 10:08 PM
Let me agree with Revalos. 90% of your speech is how you deliver. 10% is the content. I assume you know the rules of public speaking. Use quotes, pause if people laugh, don't read (meaning use your paper as something to glance at to get back on track), make eye contact to your audience and make sure you know what you're talking about, not just a paper you're reading out loud.

P.S. Revalos, your avatar is creepy. I can understand mistaken a 10 year old in the shower, but 3... Come on now!

Drew
02-18-2008, 10:11 PM
P.S. Revalos, your avatar is creepy. I can understand mistaken a 10 year old in the shower, but 3... Come on now!

This sounds like something that has happened to you before.

The Ponzzz
02-18-2008, 10:12 PM
This sounds like something that has happened to you before.

:rofl: No.

Revalos
02-18-2008, 10:34 PM
Heh...funny that I picked up the creepy avatar because I mistook Summer Glau for being 16 in another thread, but she's 26.

I thought of another speech thing for you. Ditch the video segment or have a longer segment playing in the background on mute during the entire speech. Otherwise you're right, the transition is awkward.

TheEschaton
02-18-2008, 11:26 PM
I definitely echo the suggestion to make it a bullet-point list. I'm in Trial Practice now, and the judges who teach the class insist that the worst mistake a lawyer at trial can do is be married to the words on the paper in front of him/her.

-TheE-

Farquar
02-21-2008, 05:46 AM
Let me add my dos centavos. I may be harsh but consider it hot, dirty, tough love.

The most important lesson that you can learn to improve your speech in five minutes is the principle of Primacy and Recency. In a given block of delivered information, audiences will most remember the first thing they hear and the last thing they hear. So start strong and end strong. Grab hold of the audience from the beginning and give them a slap in the face. Then let them sit back and relax as you deliver information, and then end the whole thing by slapping them in the face once more.

Now let's examine your opening: "If [I] tried to write a list of the amount of achievements Stephen Colbert has completed in the past few years of his life, I guarantee your wrist would hurt."

Now, I almost fell asleep after that first sentence. Writing is boring; no one does it any more. Your also use hyperbole. Hyperbole is boring. Lists are boring in themselves, and no list is more boring than a list of accomplishments.

Ok ok, enough criticism. Can I improve you? Here is my proposed opening for your speech:

"Stephen Colbert is better than you."

Booya. Even with a half-assed delivery, I guarantee you'll have everyone's attention.

Also, will trade more advice for racy pics. Thx.

thefarmer
02-21-2008, 05:52 AM
I think opening with this is better.

"Stephen Colbert is smarter than you. He can rip off Jon Daily, and still make millions of you pay money to buy his book. Now THAT'S smart!"

Then end with something like..

"And only in America can a second-rate funny man influence todays youth more than their parents"

TheEschaton
02-21-2008, 10:23 AM
Second rate? SECOND RATE?!?!??

Farquar
02-22-2008, 05:08 AM
Now I'm no scientician or anything, but I think this farmer guy has a problem with Mr. Colbert.

thefarmer
02-22-2008, 05:47 AM
Nah.

While both the opener and closer line were purposely designed over the top (for effect more than anything), I just don't think he's that funny.

TheEschaton
02-22-2008, 09:48 AM
Then you lack a sense of humor.

Jenisi
02-22-2008, 10:03 AM
Speech already done, and I got a crappy grade (B-) But I at least got a videotape of it to see what I'm doing wrong. I don't look up at the audience enough, which is weird because when I gave the speech I felt like I was looking up at them A LOT so I dunno :(

The Ponzzz
02-22-2008, 04:32 PM
Yea, as I was saying, speeches are all about the eye contact. If you have a piece of paper in front of you, you should NEVER read it. You only use it to remind yourself of your speech. That is why postcard/cue cards are used often because they assist you with your topics.

A B- ain't bad. Means your content was good. If you ever have any more speeches, my suggestion is to know your paper 100% in your head and when you get in front of your class, pitch the speech like a sale!

Stanley Burrell
02-22-2008, 05:38 PM
I have a 3.75 GPA and can wipe my own ass. Huzzah.

Jenisi
02-22-2008, 06:28 PM
Um Stanley, I wasn't hating on you with that comment. So calm down. No ones cares about your GPA.

thefarmer
02-22-2008, 07:31 PM
Yea, as I was saying, speeches are all about the eye contact. If you have a piece of paper in front of you, you should NEVER read it. You only use it to remind yourself of your speech. That is why postcard/cue cards are used often because they assist you with your topics.

A B- ain't bad. Means your content was good. If you ever have any more speeches, my suggestion is to know your paper 100% in your head and when you get in front of your class, pitch the speech like a sale!

My dad had a consulting firm teaching business execs how to give speeches and presentations. He always suggested bullet format on index cards, so you're not reading a piece of paper to the group, and instead, talking to them.

Jenisi
02-22-2008, 08:18 PM
I did that too and still looked down 50% of the time. I think next time I'm gonna go up without an outline that way I have nothing to look down at.

thefarmer
02-22-2008, 08:37 PM
Another trick is if you have a friend in the crowd is to have them hold up a brightly colored card (or cards if you have more than one friend). That way you can focus on the card(s) and you're automatically looking at the crowd.

diethx
02-22-2008, 11:07 PM
I have a 3.75 GPA

Mine's bigger than yours, nyah nyah.

Stanley Burrell
02-22-2008, 11:42 PM
Um Stanley, I wasn't hating on you with that comment. So calm down. No ones cares about your GPA.

Ack, ack, ack. You're fucking right.

I was drunk and smoked pot for the first time since Mexico. I'm extremely sorry. And equally embarrassed. Arrest me. Slap my ass and feed me cheesecake.

I don't know what I even mean. Ever. Forever-ever. For-ever-ever?

Go about your daily business, everyone. And my cum (LOL) is only 3.58. Cumulative is abbreviated "cum." I just noticed that: Yes. That's how awesome I am.

Anyway, speech help, eh? First off, the audience is always right. Their comments are always somewhat correct, even if they're dead wrong. What you do is use the conversation steering method depending on how wrong they are.

I.e.: Professor asks question -- More time smiling, scratching/rubbing your chin to feign an interpretation of insightfulness.

Undergrad asks question -- Lots of emphatic "yep!"'s and "sure!"'s. If you think the crowd is right, throw in a "very cool." Same thing if it's a hipster professor. More eye contact and solemn nodding if suit and tie/bizcazz'.

Expand your mind to make what is coming out of your mouth, in reciprocation, that much better. Words from the crowd like "insightfulness" suddenly becomes an awe-inspiring speech: Because you need to juice the convo' and throw it back at them with that much more chutzpah.

Good luck. Drink in moderation.